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قديم 25-08-2010, 05:38 PM   #1
 
إحصائية العضو







حزين الحرف غير متصل

حزين الحرف is on a distinguished road


افتراضي زامر الحي

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته
إخواني أعضاء هذا المنتدى الغالي يسعدني ويشرفني
أن أقدم لكم هذه القصيدة التي تفجرت بها قريحتي وهطلت علي
بدون سابق إنذار وتوالت الأبيات هي لكم كما خرجت
ولكم معها الود والورد

بحّيت                                                                                                                                                                           صوتك                                                                                                                                                                           كف                                                                                                                                                                           يازامر                                                                                                                                                                            الحيماط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬حدٍ                                                                                                                               بيطرب                                                                                                                                لو                                                                                                                                فنيت                                                                                                                                المزامير
لحنك                                                                                                                                                                           حزين                                                                                                                                                                            ونبرتك                                                                                                                                                                            مابها                                                                                                                                                                            غيوصوتك                                                                                                                                                                          تسلطن                                                                                                                                                                          لا                                                                                                                                                                           نشازٍ                                                                                                                                                                           وتكسير
تخاطب                                                                                                                                                                          الإحساس                                                                                                                                                                          ما                                                                                                                                                                          تخاطب                                                                                                                                                                          يديوهذا                                                                                                                                                                          زمن                                                                                                                                                                          صيحة                                                                                                                                                                          وصفقة                                                                                                                                                                           وتصفير
غيرك                                                                                                                                        مدح                                                                                                                                        من                                                                                                                                        يوصفه                                                                                                                                        حاتم                                                                                                                                        االطيوبنى                                                                                                                                                                          منط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬فعال                                                                                                                                                                           الردي                                                                                                                                                                           الأساطير
وأنتا                                                                                                                                                                            تخيط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬الجرح                                                                                                                                                                            وتعالج                                                                                                                                                                            الكيوترقص                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   بصوتك                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   حمام                                                                                                                                                                                                                                    وعصافير
إلا                                                                                                                                                                           متى                                                                                                                                                                            ياصاحبي                                                                                                                                                                            تحترق                                                                                                                                                                            ضيوالمجد                                                                                                                                                                           للي                                                                                                                                                                           يسرق                                                                                                                                                                           الضي                                                                                                                                                                            وينير
وإلا                                                                                                                                                                           متى                                                                                                                                                                           ياصاحبي                                                                                                                                                                            تندفق                                                                                                                                                                            ميوالناس                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   تاخذ                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   للسراب                                                                                                                                                                                                                                    المشاوير
وإلا                                                                                                                                                                           متى                                                                                                                                                                            ياصاحبي                                                                                                                                                                            تنتظر                                                                                                                                                                            ريوكل                                                                                                                               ما                                                                                                                               استقيت                                                                                                                               المزن                                                                                                                               تهطلط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬اصير
إلا                                                                                                                                         متى                                                                                                                                          إلى                                                                                                                                          متى                                                                                                                                          قول                                                                                                                                          ياخيط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬يورط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ارت بالرزقط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬صح ياط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ير
وين                                                                                                                                                                            الإجابة                                                                                                                                                                            انتظر                                                                                                                                                                            قولها                                                                                                                                                                             ليمليت                                                                                                       من                                                                                                       قولتك                                                                                                       :                                                                                                       ياخيط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬نا                                                                                                       غير
نافق                                                                                                                                                                          وجامل                                                                                                                                                                          وأدّعي                                                                                                                                                                           وهايط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬شويوإن                                                                                                                                       مامشت                                                                                                                                       مالك                                                                                                                                       سوى                                                                                                                                        دهنة                                                                                                                                        السير
لا                                                                                                                                         تمدح                                                                                                                                         الرجال                                                                                                                                         لو                                                                                                                                         مامعه                                                                                                                                          شيلو                                                                                                                  به                                                                                                                  كرم                                                                                                                  حاتم                                                                                                                  وبه                                                                                                                   نخوة                                                                                                                   الزير
أمدح                                                                                                                                كثير                                                                                                                                المال                                                                                                                                 مدفونط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬و                                                                                                                                 حيإن                                                                                                                                                                           ماجنيت                                                                                                                                                                           الفود                                                                                                                                                                           مابه                                                                                                                                                                           مخاسير
كل                                                                                                                               لحمط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬خوك                                                                                                                               المسلم                                                                                                                               وأنهشه                                                                                                                                نيولا                                                                                                                                                                           تقرّب                                                                                                                                                                           صوب                                                                                                                                                                            لحم                                                                                                                                                                            الخنازير
ولو                                                                                    كنت                                                                                    ما                                                                                     تضيّف                                                                                     ضيوفكط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬لىط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ليذبايحك                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                  يشهدط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ليها                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                  الجزازير
أكشخ                                                                                                                                                                            تغنج                                                                                                                                                                             بالدلط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬غير                                                                                                                                                                             الزيولا                                                                                                                                                                           ينفط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬الحلاق                                                                                                                                                                            شفلك                                                                                                                                                                            كوافير
لا                                                                                                                                تدعم                                                                                                                                الناجح                                                                                                                                 وإذا                                                                                                                                 صافحكط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬يوازرط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬إذا                                                                                                                                                                           تقدر                                                                                                                                                                            بدربه                                                                                                                                                                            مسامير
ياصاحبي                                                                                                                                                                           الزمار                                                                                                                                                                           مابك                                                                                                                                                                           ترى                                                                                                                                                                            بيلا                                                                                                                                                                           تستحي                                                                                                                                                                           واحنا                                                                                                                                                                            غدينا                                                                                                                                                                            مخاشير
تبغى                                                                                                                تعرف                                                                                                                 اش                                                                                                                 فيك                                                                                                                 وتعرف                                                                                                                 وش                                                                                                                 فيالسالفة                                                                                                                                                                                                                                    "شلة"                                                                                                                                                                                                                                     توجه                                                                                                                                                                                                                                     جماهير
يالله                                                                                                                                                                           مشينا                                                                                                                                                                           نترك                                                                                                                                                                            الدار                                                                                                                                                                            والحييمكن                                                                                                                                                                            نلاقيط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ند                                                                                                                                                                            الأجناب                                                                                                                                                                            تقدير

وسلامتكم

أخوكم عبد الرحمن بن سعد الضحيان
حزين الحرف

 

 

 

 

    

رد مع اقتباس
قديم 25-08-2010, 05:58 PM   #2
 
إحصائية العضو







راشد المسعري غير متصل

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افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

إلا                                                                                                     مــتـــى                                                                                                     إلـــــى                                                                                                     مــتـــى                                                                                                     قــــــول                                                                                                     يـــاخـــيطـيـورط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ــارت بـالـرزقط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬صــح يــاط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ـيـر
ويـــــن                                                                                                                              الإجــابـــة                                                                                                                              انـتــظــر                                                                                                                              قـولــهــا                                                                                                                               لــــــيملـيـت                                                                    مــن                                                                    قولـتـك                                                                     :                                                                     يـاخــيط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬نـــا                                                                     غـيــر
نـافــق                                                                                                                وجـامــل                                                                                                                 وأدّعـــي                                                                                                                 وهـايــط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬شــــويوإن                                                                                                      مامشـت                                                                                                       مالـك                                                                                                       سـوى                                                                                                       دهنـة                                                                                                       السـيـر
لا                                                                                                     تــمــدح                                                                                                     الــرجــال                                                                                                      لــــو                                                                                                      مـامـعــه                                                                                                      شـــــيلــو                                                                                     بــه                                                                                     كــرم                                                                                     حـاتــم                                                                                     وبـــه                                                                                     نـخــوة                                                                                      الـزيــر
أمـــدح                                                                                     كـثـيـر                                                                                     الـمــال                                                                                     مــدفــونط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬و                                                                                     حــــيإن                                                                                                                               مـاجـنـيـت                                                                                                                               الــفــود                                                                                                                               مــابـــه                                                                                                                               مـخـاسـيــر

حزين الحرف

صح لسانك وسلمت

ابيات جزلة من شاعر جزل

تقبل ودي و تقديري ،،،،

 

 

 

 

    

رد مع اقتباس
قديم 26-08-2010, 12:19 AM   #4
 
إحصائية العضو








مبارك بن الجوير غير متصل

وسام شاعر التميّز .: وسام يقدم لمن يستحق أن يطلق عليه
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مبارك بن الجوير is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

يالله مشينـا نتـرك الـدار والحـي
يمكن نلاقي عنـد الأجنـاب تقديـر



صح الله لسانك يابو سعد
اتفقت معك فالجزالة والحسرة
واختلفت معك فالمعنى..
وعلى قولة سبيعي رنيا:


جـيت للدنـيا وأنـا ممعي شيّ
وبروح منها ممعي شيّ منها


لكن وجهة نظري لاتسيء للود قضيه
مبدع انت كما خرجت منك قصيدتك واجزلت ورب البيت
ورأيي ما ينقص من الجمال شيئا"..
فانت شاعر شاعر شاعر يا عبدالرحمن
تقبل مروري ورأيي المتواضعان..
اخوك..

 

 

 

 

 

 

التوقيع




إيّ بالله  إنِّي  [دوسري]  واسمط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬الهرجمن   لابة   ٍط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ند   اللقى   تدبل    الكيل
للزايدي                                                              للتغلبي                                                              والفخر                                                               برجوعهود  من   وايلط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬لى   العدل   والميل
حوّل من (الاحساء)ط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬لى وجهة (الخرج)إلين   (وادي    العز)    ياط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬لّه    السيل
تلقى                                             ديار                                             الطيب/                                             وْلاتشعل                                             السرجعلم   الحيط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬له   نور   ما   غطّه   الليل

    

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قديم 26-08-2010, 12:50 AM   #5
 
إحصائية العضو







خلاّد الزايدي غير متصل

خلاّد الزايدي is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

أنت لست حزين الحرف

بل أنت رزين الحرف

من أجمل القصائد التي مرت علي في هذه القضية

وأتفق معك في كل حرف ماعدا شطر واحد

قصيدة صادقة وواعية ومدركة لمفهوم الشعر الحقيقي وليس

شعر الصخب والازعاج والحركات الجمبازية

صح لسانك إلى أبد الآبدين

 

 

 

 

    

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قديم 26-08-2010, 01:10 AM   #6
 
إحصائية العضو








عبدالله الحافر الغييثي غير متصل

وسام الدواسر الذهبي: للأعضاء المميزين والنشيطين - السبب: لنشاطه الملحوظ ومشاركاته المميزه بالموقع
: 1

عبدالله الحافر الغييثي is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

حزين الحرف
صح لسانك واعتلى شانك على هذه الرائعه
ابداع متناهي كما اشاروا الاخوان وهذه القصيده مبروكه اللي رجعت لنا ناقدنا المبدع خلاد الزايدي

 

 

 

 

    

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قديم 26-08-2010, 05:02 AM   #7
 
إحصائية العضو







حزين الحرف غير متصل

حزين الحرف is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

أخوي الغالي راشد
يسعدني ويشرفني أن تكون أول من يرد علي
لك كل الود والتحية يا أبو عبد المحسن

 

 

 

 

    

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قديم 27-08-2010, 07:43 AM   #9
 
إحصائية العضو








فارس الدبالين غير متصل

فارس الدبالين is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

حزين الحرف

صح السانك انا اشهد انك شاعر ومبدع

صح السانك على ذالجزله

وتقبل التقدير والاحترام.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Twitter@ALGZL

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قديم 27-08-2010, 10:25 PM   #10
 
إحصائية العضو







حزين الحرف غير متصل

حزين الحرف is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

شاعرنا مبارك الجوير
شكراً لك على ردك وكلامك
الذي أفتخر فيه وأتشرف فيه
عرفت ملاحظتك على البيت ولكن لا أدري ماهي الملاحظة
بالظبط فالقصيدة خرجت مني في موقف واقعي
وليس مصطنع لأغير في الكلام فنقلته كما هو لا كما يجب
وكلامك على العين والراس
ملاحظة البيت الذي نقلته هناك خطأ في الوزن وخطأ في الكلمة الأولى
يبدو أنه فقط خطأ إملائي البيت الصحيح

خلقت في الدنيا وأنا ما معي شي 000 وباروح منها مامعي شي منها
لك كل الود والتقدير

 

 

 

 

    

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قديم 03-09-2010, 04:45 AM   #11
 
إحصائية العضو







حزين الحرف غير متصل

حزين الحرف is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

أخي الشاعر والناقد خلاد الزايدي
يسعدني ويشرفني لقبك وردك
أتمنى أن أكون عند حسن الظن
وأتشرف بملاحظتك وحبذا لو ذكرتها فأنا ولله الحمد
لا أعاني من حساسية ضد النقد
فأتمنى طرحها هنا أو عبر الرسائل لأستفيد من رأيك ونقدك

 

 

 

 

    

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قديم 03-09-2010, 05:30 AM   #12
 
إحصائية العضو







ابوضيدان غير متصل

ابوضيدان is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

صح لسانك يالسنافي قصيده تحمل معنى الشعر الحقيقي
امتعتنا بهذه الرائعه اتمنى لك التوفيق
تقبل تحياتي

 

 

 

 

    

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قديم 25-09-2010, 02:16 AM   #14
 
إحصائية العضو







خلاّد الزايدي غير متصل

خلاّد الزايدي is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة حزين الحرف




أخي الشاعر والناقد خلاد الزايدي
يسعدني ويشرفني لقبك وردك
أتمنى أن أكون عند حسن الظن
وأتشرف بملاحظتك وحبذا لو ذكرتها فأنا ولله الحمد
لا أعاني من حساسية ضد النقد
فأتمنى طرحها هنا أو عبر الرسائل لأستفيد من رأيك ونقدك




لاهنت يارزين الحرف

وهذا من ثقتك في نفسك وشعرك

والملاحظة اللي عندي ماقلت أنها نقدية
قلت فقط أني ماأتفق معك في شطر يعني
مجرد اختلاف أفكار أو ذائقة لاعلاقة له بالنقد

والمقصود هو الشطر الثاني من البيت

يالله مشـيـنـا نـتــرك الـــدار والـحــي
يمكـن نـلاقـي عـنـد الأجـنـاب تقـديـر

يعني الرجال ماله ألا ربعه وجماعته مهما حصل من الأمور بينهم
أنا أدري إنك ترمي لمعنى أبعد من تفسيري السطحي هذا ويدل
على معناك عنوان القصيدة (زامر الحي)
ولكن يظل الأفضل تجنب مثل هذا من وجهة نظري الشخصية غير النقدية

والله يوفقك لكل خير

 

 

 

 

    

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قديم 25-09-2010, 02:48 AM   #15
 
إحصائية العضو








ابو زيد الغييثي غير متصل

وسام التميز: وسام التميز - السبب: لمشاركاته المتميّزه وجهده الطيب في المنتدى
: 1

ابو زيد الغييثي is on a distinguished road


افتراضي رد: زامر الحي

اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة خلاّد الزايدي مشاهدة المشاركة
اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة حزين الحرف




أخي الشاعر والناقد خلاد الزايدي
يسعدني ويشرفني لقبك وردك
أتمنى أن أكون عند حسن الظن
وأتشرف بملاحظتك وحبذا لو ذكرتها فأنا ولله الحمد
لا أعاني من حساسية ضد النقد
فأتمنى طرحها هنا أو عبر الرسائل لأستفيد من رأيك ونقدك




لاهنت يارزين الحرف

وهذا من ثقتك في نفسك وشعرك

والملاحظة اللي عندي ماقلت أنها نقدية
قلت فقط أني ماأتفق معك في شطر يعني
مجرد اختلاف أفكار أو ذائقة لاعلاقة له بالنقد

والمقصود هو الشطر الثاني من البيت

يالله مشـيـنـا نـتــرك الـــدار والـحــي
يمكـن نـلاقـي عـنـد الأجـنـاب تقـديـر

يعني الرجال ماله ألا ربعه وجماعته مهما حصل من الأمور بينهم
أنا أدري إنك ترمي لمعنى أبعد من تفسيري السطحي هذا ويدل
على معناك عنوان القصيدة (زامر الحي)
ولكن يظل الأفضل تجنب مثل هذا من وجهة نظري الشخصية غير النقدية

والله يوفقك لكل خير

بما ان الدعوة ذائقة و لست أجرؤ على التعقيب خصوصا ً على

معرف كـ ( خلاد الزايدي ) و لكن هذا البيت يذكر بالبيت الراائع و الشهير

مــوتيط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ــزيــزط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ــنـد الاجناب بــراأشـــوى                                                      ولاط·آ·ط¢آ·ط·آ¢ط¢آ·ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¸ط·آ·ط¢آ£ط·آ¢ط¢آ¢ط·آ£ط¢آ¢ط£آ¢أ¢â‚¬ع‘ط¢آ¬ط·آ¹أ¢â‚¬ع©ط·آ·ط¢آ¢ط·آ¢ط¢آ¬ـنـد                                                       الرفـــاقــه                                                       ذلــــيــلي

وهو لنمر بن عدوان وصحيح قد يكون المعنى مختلف و لكن

لها ابعاد تتصف بالحكمه

 

 

 

 

    

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